Sunday, April 7, 2013

Snippet Sunday from a W.I.P.

  For those who missed this snippet when I first wrote it, I wanted to share this snippet from my W.I.P.  These are the hidden feelings of a young man, Lee, an humanoid alien whose own planet is long gone. Along with what little is left of his race and the few people they have managed to save, they come to Earth to try to finish off the monsters who destroyed their planets. There is just one distraction he never counted on.

From Young Adult/ Sci-fi Romance W.I.P. -

  For a kid who grew up running, hiding, learning to survive and fight, there was no normal life for him. Instead he became a warrior, running on instinct and adrenalin. Coming into contact with our young heroine is a huge shock to him. His usual confident self, becomes shy and awkward. And it takes his brother’s encouragement to realize these strange feelings mean he likes the girl. By why is it that it takes more guts and pure nerve to kiss a girl than kill an alien? 

Yes, this is a very unedited W.I.P., so please excuse the confusion and thanks for stopping by everyone!


  1. I'm a little confused with the change in verb tense halfway through. It took me a few times re-reading to understand what you were saying. I like the truth in the last sentence.

    Anastasia Vitsky

  2. The POV can be streamlined a bit more, but I like the feel of this excerpt, and the characterization. You're on the right track with this one :)

  3. I'd think that kissing an alien would be particularly nervy. :-) Fun snippet, Debra.

  4. Interesting premise, can well imagine your hero will have a LOT to get used to on Earth. Terrific snippet!

  5. So he's humanoid, not human? Are he and the girl from Earth? I like his brother's encouragement and Lee's hesitancy. Terrific snippet! Definitely an absorbing story.