Sunday, September 23, 2012

Six Sentence Sunday With a Stomach Churning W.I.P-- #sixsunday

                9/23- Six Sentence Sunday With a Stomach Churning W.I.P-

  This is a six from the YA sci-fi/thriller I recently started working on. After an alien invasion and an attack on her city my heroine is running through the city with her baby brother trying to make it home. The city streets after the attack is enough to leave the strongest person's stomach churning.

                 From YA W.I.P.-
  The further she ran toward the city limit’s the more debris seemed to pile up and the site of some of it had her stomach turning. Cars, buildings and parking meters weren’t the only charred remains littering the city.
People had been driving the cars, standing inside those buildings, feeding the greedy meters quarters, even walking across the crosswalk, minding their own business.

  At 3:30 PM on a normal weekday, everyone was just hustling along, waiting for the end of the work day so they could go home to be with their families. All the people she came across would never see their families again. They wouldn’t be seeing anything anymore, like her car, their bodies were charred, bleeding, broken remains of important parts of what had once been someone else’s lives.

2 comments:

  1. I love the last part:

    ...their bodies were charred, bleeding, broken remains of important parts of what had once been someone else’s lives.

    Great six!

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  2. Great contrast between before and after!

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